Illustrated Love Stories

[Squeeky]

ILSWriter wrote : Ah good, there are at least two men who are ethical and disapprove of a doctor and a young intern being put into a position where they didn't have the backbone to turn down their very attractive young patient and her beautiful married mother. If you read and look closely you will see that the girls are the agressors here. Now gentlemen, tell me what you would have done. I can always change the story to match your ethics.

ILSWriter

Firstly let me make an overall comment on all of your stories so far. Your stories are short and within the genre/style that you made your own it would be difficult to build a realistically credible social interaction between characters. The effect then is that the reader has to be prepared to accept the shallowness. I am not by anyway decrying that, it is just a product of the limitations within which I recognise that you work.

Secondly. As to the ethical stance, I am not readily going to seek to impose. You have a storyline that you have chosen to develop, fine. There are many things portrayed on screen about which I disapprove and yet others relish.

Sometimes authors and producers put things "in our face" to elicit some kind of reaction.

If you feel that you must make a change then do so, but I sense that Greebo, like me, was merely making an observation compared with accepted practice in the real world. If that is not his position then, having the invitation, he will certain express it.

[Yamato]

Your art is terrific and your story is not bad but a little shallow I agree with Squeeky there.
True....your story is basically one long series of frames of easy sex....but there's no conflict...nothing to fight for. Everyone like's everyone immdiately....that kind of thing.

I would suggest adding an element of risk, or some type of opponent to raise the stakes and excite/arouse the reader.

What do you think?

[Squeeky]

Ah! Yes. "Shallow" summarises in one word what I was verbosely and unsuccessfully trying to convey.

[okimaon1]

Yamato wrote : Your art is terrific and your story is not bad but a little shallow I agree with Squeeky there.
True....your story is basically one long series of frames of easy sex....but there's no conflict...nothing to fight for. Everyone like's everyone immdiately....that kind of thing.

I would suggest adding an element of risk, or some type of opponent to raise the stakes and excite/arouse the reader.

What do you think?

I was just thinking that. you took the words out of my mouth. it's like these girls are the greatest sluts on earth...

[ILSWriter]

Thank you gentlemen. I really appreciate your comments. Yamato wrote:

I would suggest adding an element of risk, or some type of opponent to raise the stakes and excite/arouse the reader.

Do any of you have any specific suggestions? I write under the following constraints. I will not include in my stories BSDM, rape, boy/boy love, mother/son or father/daughter sex. Working in 3D, I also become constrained by computer memory. In my last story I had scenes with eight people. If you looked closely when they were fully clothed there was only one image of all eight. Even then only the upper parts of their bodies are shown with no background. Only after they had no clothes did all eight bodies appear but even then only the two beds were shown. My point here is I can't have any crowd scenes. No theaters, no parades, no ball games. Two other constraints I have are clothes and backgrounds. Not all girl's lingerie is the same. Some are either all on or all off. Others are made so they can be removed slowly, if you know what I mean. Men's clothes are particularly hard to find. I only have so many backgrounds I can use. I don't know how to build one from scratch. So I have to buy them.
I was told of my shallowness a couple of months ago. It was worded a little differently. I was told sex came too soon with not enough foreplay. So I ran a poll. While only 100 people took part, 80% said they were satisfied with the amount of foreplay in my stories. I guess I'll run another poll. Thanks again for your comments and I really would like some specific suggestions.

[Greebo]

I must admit that I find myself in agreement with Squeeky and Yamato here. My own view is that I am uncomfortable with both coercion and situations verging on the incestual, although I wouldn't go as far as denying others such fantasies.

I write sexual fantasy stories myself, for my own amusement, and although I have entered into the realms of coercion and advantage taking in my own writings, I find it hard - it does not flow naturally as far as I am concerned.

Any hint of incest I would not touch with a bargepole, in writing or in real life - too close a blood relationship seems dangerous to me from a human biology POV and this is echoed from a religious POV, even though I am not a slave to Judeo-Christian scrïpture.

I get the impression that your stories are moulded around your ability to create visually interesting or pleasing sexual interactions between characters with little regard to ethics or morality, whereas many of us at least like to think we try to live up to certain standards, even though we may fail on occasion.

ILSWriter wrote : Ah good, there are at least two men who are ethical and disapprove of a doctor and a young intern being put into a position where they didn't have the backbone to turn down their very attractive young patient and her beautiful married mother. [color=240140]If you read and look closely you will see that the girls are the agressors here.[/color] Now gentlemen, tell me what you would have done. I can always change the story to match your ethics.

ILSWriter

I'm not sure you even know your own characters here - the girls aren't the aggressors! They are all a bunch of devil-may-care Hedonists!

Your stories are well implemented and I find them superficially enjoyable, but they lack character and depth. Don't worry, that is true of the bulk of what we get amusement out of, including my own creations, if I am honest.

[Yamato]

Ideas:

- Neighbor's son/daughter takes picture and threatens to blackmail.
- A rough/bad neighborhood boy starts to seduce her and slowly lure to his gang and it's up to someone else to pull her away from him/them.
- Jealous neighbor calls cops. Cops file complaint one can be bribed...the other who knows?

PS: I totally understand your challenges and frustrations and admire your maturity with our critiques. I got my own fair share of criticism for the Photo Shoot but certainly learned much from that experience.

Kronn

[ILSWriter]

I don't play pool but is it legal for her to crawl up on the table like this? She is one of the characters in my newest story and I don't want anything illegal going on. She is trying to hit the 11 ball (white with red stripe) with the cue ball by her right thumb. I bet some of you didn't even notice the pool balls did you? I bet some of you aren't even reading these words are you?
BTW Kronn I thank you for your comments. I'm up to about 100 images in my new story and nothing much has happened except a couple of rapes, the maid pleasures herself and the gal in the photo above fights off the local carpenter who is trying to get in her panties. If you look around the right side of this image you will see him.

[Squeeky]

Illegal play position?
What is the game? Under the rules this might be allowed

Officially, the rules of Billiards and Snooker, and therefore pool, the player must have at least one foot in contact with the floor.

[ILSWriter]

the player must have at least one foot in contact with the floor.

She is such a little girl (95 pounds) I would like to allow her this one time up on the table. But if anyone thinks differently I'll throw this image and a couple of rear views of her while on the table into the trash.

[Greebo]

If she's playing a friendly with someone I guess they can agree to be flexible (as long as she doesn't damage anything of course!)

Mind you, it looks as though she'd have to try a different position and [no]cum[/no] come off the cushion for a successful outcome

[Yamato]

ILSWriter wrote :
BTW Kronn I thank you for your comments. I'm up to about 100 images in my new story and nothing much has happened except a couple of rapes, the maid pleasures herself and the gal in the photo above fights off the local carpenter who is trying to get in her panties. If you look around the right side of this image you will see him.

I don't appreciate the sarcasm.
Don't worry, I won't say another word about your project.

[LRM]

@ Yamato;
Please do not stop posting your thoughts. I cannot promise I will agree but I do like to see them.
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@ ILS;
Some of your story lines have exceeded my boundaries of decency/believability. I still read them start to finish at least once.
This game surpasses my normal limits but I find myself playing it often.
http://wetpussygames.com/adult-games/monica.html
Not so any of his other games.
L
Squeeky is I believe correct... HOWEVER if I for see a chance to place my cue stick in her corner pocket I will likely overlook the rule.

[ILSWriter]

I don't appreciate the sarcasm.

Kronn, I apologize. I meant no sarcasm at all. That is my problem with boards like this. I am very inexperienced in using them. I sincerely appreciated your comments. I was trying to be humorous which obviously fell flat on its face. Again I sincerely apologize.

ILSWriter

[Squeeky]

Regarding that rule, since you cannot 'economically' lower the table legs, in social environments one could allow a short person, such as a junior, to use a stool of a reasonable height and define the stool as an "elevated floor".

Don't know how Junior Competitions are regulated; probably still demand "one foot in contact with the floor".