Nice one Sylakone.
Just one remark, or one and a half. It seems the light comes from the column on the right. I might be very wrong about this but I had this idea that we don't use to see the light source in the images in the noir and chiaroscuro artistic style. What if you croped/reframed the picture to exclude that column from the picture and enhanced the light power to give the woman left side an even greater contrast. It is alright if it looks overexposed. See. I like the man's game of shadows and light on his body. But side to side the woman doesn't look that impressive and you most certainly want your women to own the pictures right?
Try to make the same contrast to her like you did to the man.
Also, she kind of disapears into her background because her figure is almost as dark as the background. She doesn't pop. You most certainly want her to pop. Either by administrating a strong contrast in her body between lit and darkened parts of her body, or by making the background much brighter than her.
I made 2 other pictures. See if you recognize who is in the first one. The 2nd is a trial with sci-fi/noir.