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Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 02:06
by shark
It's not criticisms that embarrass me. I have not participated in the MSP's game design (just tested it) but I know, from my experience, that he certainly spent many hours in the evening after his job and many weekends, just to give pleasure to lagooners. Of course, the texts are not always legible, of course his English texts are not perfect. MSP is Swedish (by the way, miss, you who are british what is your opinion about the Swedish texts?) Of course, there are some bugs, but damn, the first thing to say to MSP is thank you! No?

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 02:49
by LucaNatoli
Yeah, I have to agree with Shark on that one.

MSP for instance, would be making this game in his spare time, taking months most likely to create it, when he is not busy with work and family, to bring us a game that he makes zero dollars on. So he brought us a free game to play and enjoy, that he poured his time and effort into, even translated it into English for us, even though it is not his first language. So yeah, people you have to excuse little spelling mistakes and what not. As for gameplay, PinkVendetta that is obviously the way MSP wanted the story and gameplay to go [img]images/icones/icon14.gif[/img] .

If I tired to translate to another language that I did not speak, lets take Swedish as Shark pointed out, heck, none of my sentences would make ANY sense as I have no idea on that language lol.

So yeah, lets ease up people [img]images/icones/icon7.gif[/img] [img]images/icones/icon7.gif[/img]

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 07:23
by jfrancois323
first, the good point: the story is great! pictures are nicely done!
now the bad point (not s100% sure): sometime the text are hard to read - At the start of part 2 in front of the door white text on white floor (eye pain to read) - the clue for ending part 2 (hard to read, but im colorblind, so i let you ask with persons without this problem. if you need more infos, ask in pm)

Overall: for me, it get 8.5/10

Great job!! i hope you will made a 3rd game!!

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 07:33
by Squeeky
Pardon?
Colorblind?

No, no, no!
I have presented where one person did have distinct colour failure. His issue was not Red/Green but presented oddities in other hues.

I shall ask.

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 07:54
by jfrancois323
Squeeky wrote:Pardon?
Colorblind?

No, no, no!
I have presented where one person did have distinct colour failure. His issue was not Red/Green but presented oddities in other hues.

I shall ask.


there's 3 level of colorblind:
1st : mix some similar color ex.: 2 hue of blue (like me)
2nd : dont see some color ex.: red are gry for them
3rd : see no color at all (like a dog)

to get better explaination ; you surely see paint sample for wall painting? well, i see about 1 color every 2 shades, the second one look like the 1st or the 3rd

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 08:18
by Squeeky
Thanks for the PM.
I'm still trying to understand.

Are you having problems with the text in Shark's dialog boxes, or is it with the imagery?

Certainly he can do something about the text colour, but .... the imagery? I don't understand how that can be addressed. I mean, one takes a photograph, we cannot PhotoShop that if you get my meaning.

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 09:57
by PinkVendetta
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PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 10:00
by PinkVendetta
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Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 10:11
by paquito
If English texts aren't good enough, you could propose your help for translations you know...
And concerning the visuals ....
English could have been a bit better and more sex scenes in visual would have been nicer.

Where is the constructive comment? A constructive comment means a comment that could help the author to do better next time. And I don't see any help in your sentence.

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 10:22
by PinkVendetta
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Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 11:02
by LRM
Correction:
Squeeky and I provide suggested texts. Shark is fully capable of, and does create English texts that the two of us work from. There have been other people that have and do offer input as well. We are a team that offers suggestions. The final decision rests with Shark!
Lou
All that publish here are human... Everyone ever on this Earth with the exception of Christ and my father make mistakes!

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 11:07
by shark
PV, I said what I had to say. Continue to make lists of all the flaws of the games you've tested if you think it's your job and this is helpful ... [img]kator/smiley68.gif[/img]

Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 11:18
by PinkVendetta
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Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 11:20
by PinkVendetta
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Re: "Another Afternoon" - new on Contribution page

PostPosted: Wed, 14Oct29 11:31
by shark
PinkVendetta wrote: look at Microsoft, for years they released software and Operating systems and left it to the general public to fault find for them, save them a bundle of $$$s and then they corrected the public's errors found..

All the new designers trying to make a first game will be happy to know that they have now, thanks to you, the same tools as microsoft. [img]images/icones/icon15.gif[/img]